tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19007677.post7428930840048415742..comments2023-10-25T06:04:17.359-04:00Comments on The Life and Times of David Ferrell: The Beauty of Your HeartDavid Ferrellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07323926945994650065noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19007677.post-22930652988821880772007-06-28T21:37:00.000-04:002007-06-28T21:37:00.000-04:00There's potential in the song, but you're right: i...There's potential in the song, but you're right: it is cheesy. Or rather, the first verse is. There's something near poetic about it, but it's a bit too general. <BR/><BR/>I do like the pre-chorus and chorus section, however. <BR/><BR/>So my advice: Clean up the verses, and add more detail behind your feelings instead of keeping it general. Really dig deep and express the inexpressible emotions in your soul, as oxymoronic (or just plain moronic) as that sounds. <BR/><BR/>And yes, I know who Bonhoeffer is. Though that's no surprise to you, I hope. Considering we heard the radio drama together. ;)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09885949229746243034noreply@blogger.com